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oxoniensis's comment-porn-a-palooza last week. Reposting them here to keep my stuff quasi-organized, and also to play a little writer's-worshoppy thing.
Due to the limits of LJ's comment sizes, and MS Word's tendency to lie about number of characters used, one of my ficlets wound up being too long and had to be edited on the fly (since I was down to the wire deadlinewise) right in the comment box. So two versions of it exist, which doesn't happen when I edit in Word as usual.
The question is, which one is better? I know I tend to verbosity. I much prefer Thomas Wolfe to Tom Wolfe and the early chapters of the The Lord of the Rings are my very favorite part. My early writing was all screaming electric purple, a sort of H.P. Lovecraft/Jack Kerouac bastard child with the Southern Gothic taking over like kudzu. So one of the things I love about drabbles and limited-length fic challenges is I have to go against this grain and I learn a lot that way.
One person's already said she likes the longer version better because it's richer and sounds more like me. What do you think?
Sentimental Value
(Good Omens; Crowley/Aziraphale, NC-17. Warnings: D/s like whoa. The prompt word was "collar")
( Original Version (Longer) )
( Version 2, Radio Edit )
The second one was short enough already, and so only one version exists.
For Real
(Lost, Sayid/Sawyer, NC-17. Warnings: BDSM, racial slurs, references to torture, unsurprisingly. The prompt word was "knot")
( Smack! )
Thoughts? What is your natural inclination? Are you drunk on the music of words enough to stagger around vaguely sometimes, or are you a goal-oriented speedfreak? Are you lush and voluptuous, or lean and mean? How much do you struggle with your own style?
oxoniensis's comment-porn-a-palooza last week. Reposting them here to keep my stuff quasi-organized, and also to play a little writer's-worshoppy thing.Due to the limits of LJ's comment sizes, and MS Word's tendency to lie about number of characters used, one of my ficlets wound up being too long and had to be edited on the fly (since I was down to the wire deadlinewise) right in the comment box. So two versions of it exist, which doesn't happen when I edit in Word as usual.
The question is, which one is better? I know I tend to verbosity. I much prefer Thomas Wolfe to Tom Wolfe and the early chapters of the The Lord of the Rings are my very favorite part. My early writing was all screaming electric purple, a sort of H.P. Lovecraft/Jack Kerouac bastard child with the Southern Gothic taking over like kudzu. So one of the things I love about drabbles and limited-length fic challenges is I have to go against this grain and I learn a lot that way.
One person's already said she likes the longer version better because it's richer and sounds more like me. What do you think?
Sentimental Value
(Good Omens; Crowley/Aziraphale, NC-17. Warnings: D/s like whoa. The prompt word was "collar")
( Original Version (Longer) )
( Version 2, Radio Edit )
The second one was short enough already, and so only one version exists.
For Real
(Lost, Sayid/Sawyer, NC-17. Warnings: BDSM, racial slurs, references to torture, unsurprisingly. The prompt word was "knot")
( Smack! )
Thoughts? What is your natural inclination? Are you drunk on the music of words enough to stagger around vaguely sometimes, or are you a goal-oriented speedfreak? Are you lush and voluptuous, or lean and mean? How much do you struggle with your own style?
